Remember my post
Something's gotta give? I got a message from a follower asking me to look at the sequel he wrote to my post called
Something Gave, Something Remained. It's so nice to get this sort of feedback :-)
Here it is:
His Version (Part One)
He gently sat by the cement block, eyes squinting as he
flinched from his aching bones. The pain subsided to the smell of
seawater as he stared at the sunset, the sea waves clashing in the
distance a soothing to his ears. Closing his eyes, he folded his hands
and leaned back. A ritual he had always performed was about to start.
The plane's shadow quickly cast over him, its engine
roar a familiar sound as it climbed higher in the air. He could hear
behind him some kids running drunk with excitement and vigor. By the
time he counted up to ten, he opened his eyes, and the plane, no bigger
than a water drop, entered the clouds, vanishing from sight.
It was always at this juncture, once every 4 or 5
years, that he would stand up and jog home, prepare the remaining
children for the week ahead. But this time was different: He had just
seen his last born drift into the clouds, as all pilots did. But more
importantly, like his five children; one by one, he had seen them grow
up from babies to adults. Each child in their own way, living to further
their lives. He caught himself sighing, wondering if it was from
satisfaction of a father or the realization that he was could not have
done it alone. Rising up with his walking stick, people passing by
would see him and smile first, for he did not need to walk like a king
with a kingdom. Somewhere in his wrinkled face and sunken eyes, was the
thing you need not describe in words. He knew this, because they smiled
first, and that was why he smiled back.
47 years have passed since they asked themselves what
was on their minds that night. He could still remember her face when he
spilled his guts on impulse, fearing embarrassment. Even more
surprising, her reciprocation with her own fears/worries made him
realize what few came to know: that to love is to be vulnerable.
She gave up so much, He thought to himself in the
present. He had an idea growing from his strong-willed family, friends
and enemies included. They all said something had to give, and when he
remembered his mum singing it in his ears he would shrug it off. But
after so long, the statement was three quarters true for him, and four
quarters true for her.
He remembered her face when she started using his
surname, when the first child came to life and life's hardest challenges
arrived. He remembered her face in all of life's milestones. Time and
time again she gave, as all who truly loved did. A little of her time
every day, to be with him where she could be crunching at work. A little
of her time she gave after tucking the kids in bed. The minutes added
up, and by the time the children had come and gone he knew he did not
need to count the time anymore: he lived for her and her alone.
He remembered when the women came after him, when the
fear of being unfaithful looked like it was more than the love for her.
He smiled at naive he was, for as time took its toll, behind every new
wrinkle on her face was a story he shared. Behind every slight stumble
she had was a tale where he had to stand twice as strong for her to lean
on. Laughs shared, fights fought, tears shed, and moments together
moulded a picture with more depth and meaning than any fashion model
could exude. If beauty was in the eyes of the beholder, she had made him
see more than he could have on his own.
As he thought about these things he arrived at the
house that had bore witness to their story. The children were gone now,
and by the time he had reached for the door handle he remembered the
smell of her cooking.
They were right. Something had to give.
Fear gave way, and Love remained.
Part two (Her Version) coming soon…..